First, if Kony becomes famous it's easy to find him. Do you know why it's difficult to find Kony? It's because most people don't know about Kony. But what if everyone all over the world knows Joseph Kony? Government will be able to get a lot of information about Joseph Kony. And if becomes easier to find Kony. According to my research from the Internet, U.S government can not get information even where Kony is. Also almost 90% of people don't know who is Joseph Kony. So we should make Kony famous and stop him as soon as possible. We should spread the video 'Kony 2012' and make Kony famous. It's my first reason why I strongly agree to make Kony famous.
Second, we should protect the children who are kidnapped by Joseph Kony and working in LRA. This is the most important thing that we should do. Over 30 thousand children were kidnapped by Kony and forced to fight in LRA. But if children do not listen to Kony, he kills children or give them cruel punishment. Such as cutting their nose, mouth, ears and so on. Joseph Kony take away children's dream from them. Moreover, Kony and LRA take many other things from children. He takes friends and family from them. So one oy who was kidnapped by Kony says, he wants to die because he wants to meet his brother who ws killed by Kony, and he doesn't have any dream because of Kony. It's really cruel for children to take their dream and family. They can not think about their future because of Kony, LRA. We should protect our children and stop Kony to make children like them.
I think make Joseph Kony famous is good, but some people think making Kony famous is not good. Because they thinke if Kony becomes famous. he can do more bad things to children. But I don’t think so. Even if Kony has his own army he will be afraid if all the people around the world try to find him. I will say one more time. We should STOP Joseph Kony by making him famous. We should rescue the children who are suffering from Kony. Children should have their dreams and think about their happy future. If there are some people who don’t know about Joseph Kony, please tell them Joseph Kony is really bad guy who take dream and future from children, and we should stop him as soon as possible. We should protect our children!Thank you for reading.^^(Here is a video 'Kony 2012' and photo of Joseph Kony.)
(He is Joseph Kony.)
(This is a video ‘Kony 2012’)
The writing is good and you give very convincing reasons. You also include the opposing reasons and a rebuttal. You need to make another paragraph for your conclusion. Keep up the good work!
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